I Need Your Opinion

Okay so the object of this assignment was to create a story and write the smae story from three different people's view point. These people are not to know each other. I wrote three different stories but I realized the first one didn't fit the criteria so here are the other two. Please tell me which one is better and I should hand in.

One Stormy Night

Jerrica Black

October 2010

Calm down Kaitlyn. This is a safe place; nobody can hurt you here. They won’t let it happen.

            Why does there have to be so many people? Stop staring at me, didn’t you get a good enough look the last time you saw me? Eww! Oh my god. Why is he smiling at me? He’s so gross. Greasy, wild hair. Intense, dark eyes. Don’t cry Kaitlyn. Don’t cry. You promised yourself you wouldn’t cry. Who is that? He’s got a brother? No. It can’t be. There’s still one walking around free despite the outcome. Kaitlyn, you’re safe here. They can’t hurt you.

             It all comes flooding back any way. “No! Stop! You’re hurting me!” His big hands are all over my body. It’s cold lying on the concrete floor. It’s storming outside. Nobody can hear my screams.

            I’m safe here. I’m safe here. I’m safe…

***

            Mmmmm, there she is. Her long, blond hair as gorgeous as ever. I wonder if it still smells like strawberries? I wonder if she’s wearing the same perfume? Vanilla and flowers. I can smell it now. If only I could get just a little closer. I wish I could run my hands through her hair again. Then down her neck. Then…

            Alex! Snap out of it! You’re in a courtroom on trial! Pure mind. I can’t think about these things right now. Clear it out. I can’t risk a slip up; not today.

            But she’s just so beautiful.

***

            You disgusting, perverted bastard. How could anyone do such a thing? Look at him. He’s still running it through his mind. You can see it in those shifty eyes. He’s so disgusting!

            The poor thing. She’s got so much time left in life. It’ll never be the same for her. She’ll never look at a man the same way again. Maybe she’ll never trust anyone again.

            Guilty. No doubts about it.

OR

Sometimes Life’s Too Hard

Jerrica Black

October 2010

This is the second jumper this week! What is wrong with this city? Not to mention that guy who hung himself from the tree in the park.

            No way? She’s pregnant too! This is just great. Now I have to try to talk her down. Two lives are on the line!

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            I’m going to do it. I’m jumping. There is no way I’m dealing with this pain anymore. Nobody loves me. I’m a burden to this world. I’ve been locked inside this body for too long even though I don’t deserve it by any means.

            There is too much pain. My mom never cared; she was always too drunk. My dad left before I was born into this miserable life. And I was raped. Now my boyfriend wants nothing to do with me. It’s not like I asked for that man to impregnate me. I don’t deserve to live and neither does my unborn child, goodbye.

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            Oh my god. Is that a girl up there? Why is she up there? She’s so young, where the hell are her parents? They must be so worried. She’s got so much ahead of her, why would she do this?

            Oh. She’s pregnant. She’s so close to brining a child into this world. Why doesn’t she want to witness that kind of miracle, she’s come so far.

            This girl is so stupid; she plans to kill herself and the baby? I don’t think she’s going to do it. This is just a scream for attention.

            Oh…

My…

God…

I can’t believe it.

What just hit my hand? Is that-? No. Blood?

            She’s dead.