What if You’d
Never Left?
July 2013
It’s been so long since I’ve seen you.
Crazy how we can pick up where we left off,That we can be as we once were,
When years have passed and things have changed.
It’s like it was only yesterday
We were joking and teasing and laughing;Like it was only the day before,
That I set eyes on you for the first time.
It’s like nothing’s changed, you’d never gone away;
You’d never moved on to a different life;Never made yourself into something more.
A man with a future and somewhere to go.
It’s like our lives never parted,
That you’ve been here all along;Like you’d stood by my side when things went wrong.
Somehow, you and I stayed strong.
It’s like you came back
Because you were tethered To the life we almost had;
To a life we could have now.
I'm curious to hear what your thought process was on the meter of this piece, because it seems to never really settle. The lines keep the reader permanently off balance until the second last stanza. It'd be really interesting if you did that deliberately in order to indicate that, separately, your lives weren't able to settle into any semblance of rhythm.
ReplyDeleteIn a way it was deliberate but if someone had asked me what I had done I don't think I could have put it the way you did. I really enjoy your comments by the way. I like the fact that you are giving literary feedback; I find that really hard to find. People are always like, "Ya, I liked that poem." lol
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